Tag: Writing

These Shoes have a story to tell

LI: To use the 5 senses and personification to help us paint a picture with words. To understand that personification is to give an inanimate object human qualities

Our challenge was to co construct a text using personification and the senses to describe the story behind the shoes in this image. We sat back to back and weren’t able to talk to each other so we had to write one sentence at a time. Half way through Mrs Anderson challenged us to include a rhetorical question and a simile or metaphor, adjectives, adverb and a metaphor. Once we had completed this part of the challenge we joined together with another group to share our writing and make sure what we had written made sense. After that part of the challenge was finished we used the punctuation points game to see how much we used puncuation similie, adjectives, adverb, rhetorical question. We marked eachother’s punctuation against the points table. We then had a chance to check our own work against the points table. That was fun because every point our partners missed meant we could take a point off theirs.

I found this activity fun and enjoyable because we had a chance to collaborate and work together as a team.

What happened down the stairs?

LI : To understand the 5 senses can be used to strengthen a description.

Our challenge was to co construct a text using the olfactory, auditory, gustatorial, visual and kinethetic senses to describe the story behind the shoes in this image. This time we were able to speak and sat facing our partners. Once we had completed this part of the challenge we joined together with another group to share our writing and make sure what we had written made sense and had met the language feature challenge.

I found this activity intresting and fun because I had the oppurtunity to work and collaborate with my partner and try to add some more strong vocabulary into my story to make it intresting and powerful for the person reading it. 


Procedural Writing

LI: To write a set of clear instructions that show us how to make a hangi.

Title: How to make a Hangi

A Hangi is a traditional formal way of doing underground cooking by the Maori.

  1. dig a pit but slightly bigger than the food basket.
  2. create a stack by using the wood crates. also using volcanic stones and wood.
  3. light wood with a  lighter on the stacks in 3 – 4 in different places.
  4. peeling and getting the vegetables and getting the -meat prepared.
  5. let the fire burn for 3 – 5 before cooking.
  6. place the food into baskets.  into the basket. Also making sure someone is watching the fire
  7. put in banana leaves or foil inside the food basket
  8. place wet cloths on top of the hangi.
  9. use shovels to transport hot rocks from fire to trap the heat inside the hangi
  10. After 3-5 hours you scrape the dirt carefully take off the cloth and then remove each cloth carefully off the Hangi.
  11. When removing one of the last cloths careful for any dirt that may get into the the food.
  12. Carefully take the food basket out with someone’s help, then enjoy the food.

Today we unpacked how to follow and write a set of instructions. To do this effectively your instructions need to be explicit and the steps to follow ordered. Each step begins with an instructional verb and should be written in a way that is easy to understand.

Make sure someone is watching the food or fire. Don’t leave the food unattended. Always have people to help you.

I enjoyed writing the instructions  because it helped me understand how to make hangi.




A Moment in time

LI: To recount and explore the learning and experiences from our Year 7/8 camp

Our group wrote a poem based on our senses like auditory, tactile, visual, and kinesthetic. We used our prior knowledge and came up with different words and ideas that describe Hunua Falls. These moment in time poems represents our experience at Kokako Lodge. One of our ideas were ” I heard the roaring of the water as it gushed down from the steep and rugged cliff top. We then used word hippo to find more powerful words to strengthen our poems.

I found this activity hard and fun because it was hard making up poems with words that describe hunua falls, eventually we used word hippo that made it more easier because it gave us powerful words to stregthen my group poems.

Explanation Writing

LI: To understand the structure and language features in an explanation

How did Goldie Locks upset the Bears family?

To upset someone is to make someone unhappy, disappointed, or in a state of worry. In the story of the Goldilocks and the Three Bears she made disappointing decisions. Above all, have you ever made someone in a state of stress?

In the fairytale of the Goldilocks and the Three Bear. Goldie Locks makes some disappointing bold moves with this in mind. Goldilocks’ curiosity took over and she went into the house of the three Bears. Goldilocks sat on a chair which was just right then suddenly it collapsed, the smell of the porridge made her hungry so she ate all of the porridge. After that porridge she felt tired so she found the three Bears beds but she slept on the bed that was just right. However when she was having a cosy nap the three Bears walked into their house, looking devastated at the shocking mess in the house.

If someone came into my house I would be shocked and terrified, if someone broke my favourite chair I would be angry, if someone ate my food, I would be furious and if someone was sleeping in my bed I would be aggravated.  

To help us understand how to write an explanation we looked at the purpose, the structure (what it looks like) and the language features. An explanation tells us how or why something is the way it is. To help us understand this we learnt about cause and effect. Cause and effect is an action and a reaction. We used the story of Goldilocks and the 3 Bears to help us understand this. Here is our explanation that describes how Goldilocks upset the Bear family.

This activity was cool because I learnt some new things about explanations.

Topes Structure

TOPES stands for Title, Orientation, Problem, Events and Solution.

T stands for Title, the title is used to make people want to read the story.

O stands for Orientation, orientation is used to introduce the Character or the main Character and the world the story is in.

P stands for Problem, the Problem is the cause for the main Characters, need to act.

E stands for Events,the Events is detailing the action of the Characters.

S stand for Solution,solution is showing how the world looks now.

Informal and Formal

Formal, Informal.

Formal, formal is mostly used when talking speaking to people you never met, or don’t know, For example is you want to get a job and have to send a email, you should use formal laguage.

Informal, informal lagauge is used when talking to people you are really close with, or people you have known for a long time.

Then done a task where I had an informal text then made into an formal text.


Commanding Conversation

I done a task called Commanding Conversation.

First i found a photo.

Next i had to think what to write about.

Lastly i wrote about 2 horses, Their is a horse who wanted someone to play with and a other horse just minding his own buissness and just walking around lonley.

I enjoyed this task because i get to use my imaganation, I need to improve on my conversation.

State Your Opinion

State your opinion.

When sharing opinions make sure to use APE which means assertion,proof and explain. you have to use APE when sharing opinions.

Assertion is when say what it shows in the picture, when saying proof say the reason, when explaining the opinion say the reason you think that, for example if there was a picture of a younger brother and a older brother fighting over a teddy bear, can say what you see, the reason and why you think that.

Editing Sentence

Today I completed a writing task called editing Sentences.

First,we played a warmup Kahoot that was guess the logo.

Next,I saw some mistakes in the words that  Mr Wong put into the sentences. I went to fix how they were spelt.

Lastly,I fixed how they were spelt. It was sort of easy to fix it.

I liked editing sentences. I was good at thinking of what words to use. I do not know what I need to improve on.